I know that’s a big blob of text at the top of the page. Self editing is tough, cause you can always convince yourself that any detail or bit of dialog qualifies as world building, and conversely you can tell yourself the more you cut, the better an editor you are. Each of those is only sometimes true, so I just write like I do and edit as I go. Hopefully it’s the right amount. Also hopefully all the air traffic stuff makes sense. It’s not supposed to look like an actual air traffic controller’s screen, but actual “this is what a flying person sees when they look down” maps and combine them with layers of practical information.
I think I’ve shown a closeup of the wrist com before, but the buttons weren’t glowing. They only light up after you interact with it, so I guess Sydney just poked the screen.
I think the funniest thing on this page is how Sydney immediately repeats her mistake when going for the high five. I just wish I could have fit it on the page proper.
Forgot to mention: This page colored by Keith.